The Pantomime…

The artist is Damir Davarovic at DeviantArt

Peter waded through the water while the other fishermen stood precariously on the wooden boats. He had caught a glimpse of it. He had a gut feeling that his search was going to come to an end. He would finally get an answer to the question that had been haunting him for the past twelve hours. It was only the previous day that he had smiled under the very same sun as he headed towards the growling sea to catch fish. But that day things were different. Each passing moment reminded him of his helplessness. Each rising wave dropped hints of an impending doom. Each breath he took seemed to suck life away from his body. Β Gradually. Silently.

His companions stood on the boats, watching their pal as he made his way through the somber waters. They waited silently and pretended that nothing had happened. Their fishing net lay immersed in the water as they exchanged short glances, understanding what the other person was going through. No words were uttered. None. They stood their like pantomimists who didn’t speak a word but voiced their feelings through their faces. Their friend Peter had been very calm and they did not want to disturb this calmness by offering their condolences.

Peter bent and looked closely. At first he saw his own reflection which gradually became blurred by the image of a dead body. He was right. It was Sophie, his wife.

The previous night he had returned home to find his wife missing. His neighbours had informed him that they had heard voices but by the time they reached his house Sophie was gone. Everything was in disarray and most of the expensive items were missing. Ever since then Peter had been out with his friends looking for his wife.

Finally, he had found her. He lifted Sophie’s body in his arms and looked at her face. At places it had been eaten up by the fish. They had taken their revenge by feeding on those very people who killed them. His friends took the cue and pulled back the net. The thing that they had been trying to catch had been caught. Peter walked towards the boat and placed the body gently on the net. They rowed back with a dead body and a handful of dead fish.

The sea was unusually quiet. There was mayhem in his heart. The pantomime had come to an end.

Thursday Tales



26 responses to “The Pantomime…”

  1. Harsha K N says :

    Short good read πŸ™‚ your writing grasps readers mind. Waiting for some loong reads also πŸ˜€

  2. Destination Infinity says :

    The concept of revenge is unique to very few species (like humans, elephants) – I guess it does not apply to fishes. Not sure though! Emotionally, this story is complete but events wise its incomplete (I feel). So, is there a message in this story?

    Destination Infinity

    • Chhavi says :

      Well as far as the revenge is concerned it is just the way I have interpreted things. Not to be taken literally πŸ˜€ This piece of prose has been written by looking at the picture that has been inserted. These are the thoughts that entered my mind on seeing the picture. So, event wise, it might be a little incomplete

      • Destination Infinity says :

        I guess its an open-ended story – with the events left to audience’s imagination. I thought some kind of a fish-ghost had come and killed the wife and taken her to the sea – So, sometimes its not good to leave it to the readers imagination πŸ˜›

        Destination Infinity

    • Bikram says :

      Fishes have a very short span of memory.. they forget .. thats why they seem healthy and happy in a little aquarium πŸ™‚

  3. jabblog uk says :

    My goodness, revenge of the exploited! Now, what happened to the spoils?

    • Chhavi says :

      Yeah. That’s how I looked at it. The fish got a chance to take revenge by feeding on one of the members of the human race. The spoils of the war (i.e. the tiny pieces of flesh they consumed) reside safely inside the fish πŸ™‚ πŸ˜‰
      Thanks for stopping by jabblog uk πŸ˜€

  4. Smita says :

    A gripping story which leave some questions unanswered but nonetheless a good quick read πŸ™‚

  5. Bikram says :

    Revenge.. I beleive in It. I dont forget easy.. well I dont forget simple. I have not go and taken my revenge but YEah one day maybe when the Time is right..

    I guess this is the way of nature.. But how did the wife die in first instant .. you can pick another story out in there .. did someone kill her and threw her in the ocean…

    and the sea is unusually quiet because after the revenge there is always SILENCE…

    • Chhavi says :

      Oh my god!!! Thanks for telling me that. I guess I’ll have to make sure I never invite your wrath πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜€ The idea of writing another story is a good one… May be I’ll come up with a story called “How Sophie Died” in the days to come.

  6. Deboshree says :

    Very engrossing read Chhavi… I only wish there was more.
    I have a weakness for tales of the sea and this one uses it as an excellent backdrop. The title too – carefully chosen – and very apt. It is strange how often our so called human emotions are theatrical when seen from a neutral point… something like watching a video without sound.

    Super like Ms. Writer! πŸ˜€

    • Chhavi says :

      Thank you so much Deboshree πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€ I am glad you liked the story. You are right. Many a time insignificant events and emotions seem important when we observe them carefully . It’s just a matter of one’s perspective πŸ™‚

      Ms. Writer !!! πŸ™‚ That was very flattering. It made me smile πŸ™‚

  7. Swaram says :

    Agree with Smita! But amazingly well written based on that pic πŸ™‚

    • Chhavi says :

      Swaram!!! Thanks… I’ll take care not to leave any questions unanswered in my forthcoming stories . Thank you for your feedback πŸ™‚

  8. Leo says :

    Revenge of the fish? πŸ˜‰ That’s quite a unique way you took the plot, Chhavi.. Well written. I agree with Bikram here, another story is quite possible through your story..! πŸ™‚

    • Chhavi says :

      Thank you Leo. The part dealing the with revenge of the fish was a little unconventional but I am glad you appreciated it. πŸ™‚ I’ll try to come up with a sequel although I prefer leaving a few things to the reader’s imagination πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚

  9. Madeleine says :

    Chilling and evocative and moving. Great writing :O)

  10. trisha says :

    this was really, really painful chhavi. you wrote it so beautifully. glad that you visited my blog and i could get back to you.

    thanks for the beautiful story and visit.

  11. jeevan says :

    wao very nice story

  12. Tan says :

    Read some of your stories…. Nice ones…. I too have written some short fiction pieces… Please visit my space if you like πŸ™‚

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